[WernerTWC]

Rhymes or not, i like it!
Maybe, that the rhymes not matches everytime sounds a little bit like "rough rhymes",... fits to the poem imho.

Edit:

It's not a good one but why not posting it?

also a nice one, yeah, why not posting!

[Godcrusher]

Children of the night and day
I awakened him to stay,
To remember those who kill and slay
That the time has come to pay...

Born in a place without escape
His strength grown bigger than his fate.
He's came to tell the Sleeper
That the time has comed to pay,
He's came to tell the people
That there will be no more betray.

May the light wich shines on him
Endure the evil wich camed in
The dark hour of injustice
At the place without chapters...

Innos pray for him and fight with him,
Together you can defeat the evil
Hidden in the minds of people...
In the hearts of heroes.

It's not a good one but why not posting it?

hey great! Post more

[rockfest]

Thanks for....welll you know what.....

[rekinu]

I like your poem Godcrusher, but why don't you try to make verses longer so that you make less strophes(you have 8)...only a suggestion..

rockfest your poem is good, and the last 2 verses are great ...

"Hidden in the minds of people...
In the hearts of heroes. "

[rockfest]

Glad you all like it. I don't know what hit me at that time...it wroted it about two weeks ago. I don't know if i can make another one like it.